澄海实验小学   503   林雯

Hello, everyone. Today is special. Why? Because today is my birthday, we hold a birthday party at home. I can wear my favourite dress. I can invite many friends to come to my party.

   When the party begins, we eat a birthday cake and sing the birthday song. The cake is very big and beautiful. It’s tasty and sweet. We eat a lot.

   After that ， my friends and parents give me many presents. Wish me a happy birthday! I’m very happy.

     I love my birthday party!

Kelly 老师点评：小作者用轻松的语气描写自己的生日晚会，

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本期优秀小写手名单：   龙湖小学    503     陈   颖

               澄海凤翔中心小学   502     蔡佳烨

               澄海凤翔中心小学   501     朱铭豪

               澄海凤翔中心小学   501    卢家智